How many IELTS Writing Task 2 exam questions have you practiced in the form of Opinion Esay? Today, let’s work with Ms. Quynh to fix a rather difficult exam, which was released earlier this year, which is the exam below.
The other day we fixed the Discussion Esay topic. If you want to refer to this sample again, please click here Correction of IELTS Writing Task 2 – Discussion Essay – Topic Children
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Analysis of each step of writing IELTS Writing Task 2
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Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Topic analysis:
– Format: Opinion essay
– Layout: 4 paragraphs (1 intro, 2 body paragraphs, 1 conclusion)
Some opinions say that we can completely agree and disagree, but this will make your article inconsistent in terms of content and confused. We should choose an opinion that we can think of more ideas to write about.
for the following reasons:” For this article, she will choose “Agree” for the following reasons:
– Being able to witness firsthand entertainment, motivation, inspiration
– Show respect for culture learn about history, culture, authenticity.
1. Introduction
Recommended vocabulary: remnants (n): ruins (usually in the plural) – Replace historical objects
– Paraphrase: Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer.
We write: In this day and age, many people argue that works of art or historical remnants can be observed online; therefore, the necessity of traditional museums and art galleries is denied.
– Express an opinion: I disaagree with this opinion because museums or galleries are very important.
To write better, we should put important into the noun form importance be of great importance = be very important
We write: This can be a sound argument but to me personally, I disagree with this opinion since museums or galleries are still of great importance in the modern world and justifications are as follows.
2. Body Paragraph 1:
Let’s do the following:
There is a wide ___ of reasons:
A. load
B. array
Note: a wide array of something
In this section, we will develop ideas with other spellings:
First: There is a wide array of reasons (= there is a great number of reasons) that account for (to be the explanation or cause of something) the magnitude (=importance) of museums but the most prime one is that humans are given the opportunity to consider great art works.
– In contrast to hectic schedule at work or at school, it is likely that the exclusively designed space and air (?) in museums or galleries may act as a hub for entertainment and it will help people feel relaxed.
Additionally, having real experience of seeing history-related objects or famous artworks will generate inspiration or new sources of ideas for those who are not only in the field of art or history but also for people in other professions.
3. Body Paragraph 2
– Consider from show respect (too common) -> spell from “sense” -> phrase develop a sense of respect towards somebody/something
We write: The second reason is that museums and galleries help us develop a sense of respect towards history and art of our own country or other countries in the world.
– Judging from the aesthetic field: the field of art
We have a sentence: Admiring (replaces contemplating) real historical objects or artworks can help people learn more about their own country’s history and aesthetic field, thus making them cherish. part of their national identity. (national identity)
– Consider the sentence: Furthermore, the beauty (=sophistification) of art or the intensity of war will be shown, which enable people to experience the ____ (authenticity) that cannot be seen
on the Internet
-> It should be written like this: Furthermore, the sophistication of art or the intensity of war will be shown, which enable people to experience the authenticity that cannot be seen on the Internet.
– The clearest example is when one can observe the real “Mona Lisa” at the museum, it may be a valuable cultural experience that hardly anything can compare.
-> Should be written like this: The most conspicuous (=clear) case-in-point (=example) is when one can observe the real “Mona Lisa” at the museum, it may be a valuable cultural experience that hardly anything can compare .
4. Conclusion
In summary, although some people may claim that museums or art galleries are not necessary in the modern world, I am still in favor of the opinion that they still play a critical significance in our life.
Please watch the video carefully to understand the explanation and good writing with Ms. Quynh!
Complete sample essay
In this day and age, many people argue that works of art or historical remnants can be observed online; therefore, the necessity of traditional museums and art galleries is denied. This can be a sound argument but to me personally, I disagree with this opinion since museums or galleries are still of great importance in the modern world and justifications are as follows.
There is a wide array of reasons that account for the magnitude of museums but the most prime one is that humans are given the opportunity to consider great art works. In contrast to hectic schedule at work or at school, it is likely that the exclusive designed space and ambience in museums or galleries may act as a hub for entertainment and it will help people feel relaxed. Additionally, having real experience of seeing history-related objects or famous artworks will generate inspiration or new sources of ideas for those who are not only in the field of art or history but also for people in other professions.
The second reason is that museums and galleries help us develop a sense of respect towards history and art of our own country or other countries in the world. Admiring real historical objects or artworks can help people learn more about their own country’s history and aesthetic field , thus making them cherish part of their national identity. Furthermore, the sophistication of art or the intensity of war will be shown, which enables people to experience the authenticity that cannot be seen on the Internet. The most conspicuous case-in-point is when one can observe the real “Mona Lisa” at the museum, it may be a valuable cultural experience that hardly anything can compare.
In summary, although some people may claim that museums or art galleries are not necessary in the modern world, I am still in favor of the opinion that they still play a critical significance in our life.
Hope the sample article will help you more effective reference learning resources. In addition to this sample lesson, you can refer to the previous lesson on how to write effective articles:
Unit 25: Absolute error in IELTS Writing Task 2
Things to pay attention to when reviewing to achieve Writing 7.0+
